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Will this draft fetch me clients?

Below is a mail which I drafted after I read a recent post by Alok ji on rodinhoods – “The Ego Less, Hungry, Humble Entrepreneur ALWAYS WINS!” I was inspired and even before commenting below it I pressed the ‘compose’ button and started drafting one. 

I realize, its highly inspired with many words like ‘a cup of coffee’, ’20 minutes’, etc taken from Alok ji’s drafted mail. But I couldn’t resist myself.

But still, I wanted to have a feedback on this. My partner says it’s too long, but that he can’t find anything to cut short. I could have re-drafted it again, again and again. And I will definitely.

But this one was my first thought with no looking away from the screen before I typed the last letter. So it’s raw.

Inviting your suggestions.

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Hi

We are nailbites, an advertising agency based in New Delhi. 

That sounds like a regular cliched line. But it communicates. And this is what we stand for.

Communicating ideas the way they should in a manner that strikes the right chord.

It seems you are measuring our level of smartness. Hold on. We are not smart, we just try to be.

We are rather a young yet humble team of enthusiastic nailbiters (aka thinkers) with many qualities like being proactive, action-oriented and meaningful with our work.

We are not known to many. But those who know us, stay with us. 

We do Concept/Creation/Communication via print ads, scripts, articles, hoardings, online marketing, social media engagement, press releases, presentations, theme calendars, conceptual designs, guerilla ads, etc.

‘etc’ because ideas have no limit. You can come up with your communication requirement and as ‘a thinking hub’, we may take your brand to places in our own ways.

Attached is our company profile for your kind perusal. We have kept it brief to give you a glimpse of what we do. 

Can we meet this coming week so that we can carry more of our work and more of our ideas. We won’t take more that 20 minutes of your time. And we will make sure, it was worth it. 

PS: Just offer us a cup of coffee – it gets us creative people kicking to do more !

Looking forward, very genuinely.

Regards,

(Mail Signature with links)

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